Monday, May 4, 2015

Letter to Bert: Advanced Draft

Dear Mr. Eisenstadt,

            My name is , and I’m a student in Dr. Justin Rogers-Cooper Seminar in Teaching Writing class. My major at LaGuardia Community College is Childhood Education; my future goal is to become an elementary teacher. I took this course not only because it pertains to my major but, because I also enjoy writing. I like the fact that while I’m still learning throughout the course and enhancing my writing skills, I’m also helping and guiding someone else through there own writing which I admire. Throughout the course there have been two texts that have helped me as student and tutor which are Tutoring Writing by Donald A. McAndrew and Thomas J. Reigstad and Active Voice by James Moffett. These two texts demonstrate different techniques, methods and strategies to use when it comes to tutoring. Throughout my four observations at the Writing Center, there were several strategies that I noticed that were effective such as HOC’s (High Order Concerns) and Collaborative Learning that was very effective. But I also witnessed LOC’s (Low Order Concerns) that wasn’t necessary during a tutoring session. I believe that as a tutor you should give each student you’re very best when you are tutoring.  As a tutor you want to make that you’re taking all of the student concerns into consideration, while still focusing on the main issues of their paper that can contribute to the student success. 
            The best tutoring session I observed was during my fourth observation at the Writing Center. A girl who was in ENA 101 was preparing to take the CATW Exam. She came in with an assignment that her professor gave her, which was similar to how the CATW Exam is. She came into the tutoring session looking nervous but yet anxious, not knowing what to expect. She brought in a rough draft of her essay, which her teacher graded and gave back to her. The tutor read the essay, asked questions to the student, and then gave his feedback. The technique of Collaborative Learning played a vital role in this tutoring session. The tutor and writer share equal conversation, in problem solving, and the decision making” (McAndrew and Reigstad 26). I like how the tutor asked the student her knowledge about the CATW Exam and whether she knows what the test requires. He also asked her if she understood what the professor was asking from her. The tutor didn’t just give his opinion or thoughts without getting the student input as well. After he read the essay, he told her a little bit of information about the CATW exam. Since she wasn’t fully aware about the exam, he saw that she just basically summarized the article which is not what she’s supposed to do. The tutor then mentioned something that stood out to me while he was discussing the CATW Exam to the student, he said that “all of the students that take this test will have the same summary about the article but what stands out to the person grading the exam, is seeing how well the student is able to connect the idea of the article to their argument”. To help the student improve her essay the tutor also used a method mentioned in the book Tutoring Writing by Donald A. McAndrew and Thomas J. Reigstad, by Vygotsky explaining that students have a "level of potential development" where “the student works with the help of a coach or teacher to move beyond the point from what they can currently do” (McAndrew and Reigstad 2). I felt that with this method the tutor really demonstrated to the student not only what to include in her essay, but showing her how to include more information in her essay. Since the student also needed help developing her ideas and structuring her essay, the tutor also focused on HOC’s in this tutoring session for example, developing her topic sentence and giving examples from the text which she could connect to her own personal experience that could help develop her essay into a good argument.  The techniques and strategies used in this tutoring session really influenced the student because she left the session smiling and actually much more excited about this assignment than when she first came in the Writing Center. I like how the tutor focused on the students main concerns such as her HOC’s (High Order Concerns) and involved Collaborative Learning bringing both of their opinions as one to help her essay reach its full potential. I agreed with everything that the tutor did in this tutoring session; he not only helped the student improve her essay but also built her confidence wanting to return to the Writing Center.
            Opposed to my second tutoring session that I observed in the Writing Center, there were strategies and methods that the tutor used which, I would not use when tutoring a student. At my second observation at the Writing Center, a student came in with a rough draft of an essay that her teacher corrected but she still needed more help with the essay. She was in an ENG 101 class; with an essay she had to write about pertaining to her future goals and why she wanted to pursue those goals.  Her body language and face from the start of the session looked like she didn't want to be bothered at all. The tutor first read the student essay, along with the teacher’s comments and proceeded to give her feedback on it. The student didn’t have a thesis statement that allowed the reader to know what her essay was going to be about, and her sentences were not structures properly. So the tutor then explained to the student what she had to include in her essay, but didn’t ask the student if she understood what she had to do or if she knew how to develop a thesis statement for her essay. She just mentioned it. The tutor then gave the student a worksheet to work on for the remaining time of the session to help with her grammar and spelling throughout her essay, which I felt, was not necessary.  The strategy of LOC's (Low Order Concerns) played a major role in this session, which effected how the student felt throughout the rest of the tutoring session. According to the book Tutoring Writing by Donald A. McAndrew and Thomas J. Reigstad LOC's (Low Order Concerns) “effect on the writer may be harmful and adverse to the goals of tutoring” (McAndrew and Reigstad 17).  I felt like the tutor should have focused more time helping the student develop a good thesis statement and discuss more ideas and details to add in her essay.
A solution that I would propose as a tutor in this situation is to help the student develop her thesis statement. I would ask her what is the message that she wants the reader to know when they read her essay. From there I would allow the student to brainstorm and jot down different ideas that she can refer to that can help develop her thesis statement. Once, we work through her thesis statement we can then discuss a topic sentence along with supporting details as to “why” she wants to join the marines, which she said, and “what” developed her interest to join the marines. I would also get the student feedback as well, like her thoughts on whether she understands the necessary steps that she should take in order for this essay to be successful. According to Active Voice by James Moffett “Questions may be to clarify something puzzling, to corroborate an impression you have, to see why the author did this or did that at a certain point” (Moffett 20).  Based on Moffett, I agree that a question allows the tutor and student to be in equal participation in the assignment. By asking questions you as a tutor may understand more why the student wrote a certain idea in their essay or the reason behind it.
As I continue my tutoring, I learn something different each time I tutor a student. Through all of my observations and tutoring sessions that I do, I look forward to using all of the techniques, strategies, and methods mentioned in the texted Tutoring Writing by Donald A. McAndrew and Thomas J. Reigstad and Active Voice by James Moffett as well as class discussions. I realized that though each session is different, all students are not the same but are unique in their own way to achieve academically. It is important to be positive but also and patient with each student that you tutor. At times I’m going to have stronger papers than others; but helping those papers leave in a better state than when it first met my eyes is all that matters. I want to motivate the students’ that I tutor to try writing their best, learning different techniques and methods that will help them in the future. I want to thank you for allowing students like me, who want to become future educators experience this. I look forward to working with many more students, helping them to the best of my ability. Thank you for this opportunity.




Sincerely,



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